Yes, it was meant for the hospital, which is why I don't want to show how I would change it for hospital use without her permission. I don't want to be rude. It's just a lot longer than what I would recommend to my own clients. If ClothDiaperMePlease doesn't want me to interfere, then you can feel free to PM me with yours when it's done and I can comment on it (actually you can do this regardless).
I didn't mean to use hers or hijack this thread. I just thought it could be useful for everyone if we could see a sample of how you think it should be written for the hospital. Just covering about three random things would help a bunch.