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Old 02-02-2012, 10:22 PM   #11
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Re: Paper help- nevermind :-) I'll try harder on it tomorrow

What school are you going to? What class is it?

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Old 02-02-2012, 10:25 PM   #12
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What school are you going to? What class is it?
Just PM'd you. It's Troy University. The class is Diverse Learners. It's about special education. What is sad is I absolutely LOVED the class. I HATE writing papers.
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Old 02-02-2012, 10:48 PM   #13
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I would remove the word "possibly" from both sentences.

He even notes that possibly the reason the risk is higher among twins is because of the crowded uterine environment. Word says correct way is twins are.

He even notes the possibility that the risk is higher among twins due to the crowded uterine environment. (cite)


Another study published in Archives of General Psychiatry, around the same time as Dr. Hallmayer's has even suggested that antidepressants may possibly be a factor.

Unknown name Archives of General Psychiatry study, contemporary with Dr. Hallmayer's article, suggested/stated/theorized that antidepressants may be a factor. (cite)


Without reading the material surrounding these sentences, this is the best I can do with editing. It may not make sense in context.
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Old 02-02-2012, 10:50 PM   #14
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Re: Paper help- nevermind :-) I'll try harder on it tomorrow

If you still need help let me know
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Have you tried printing it out and reading it on paper? That's the first thing I do with every.single.paper I write, because it makes it so much easier to "see" the mistakes and places where it could be reworded.
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I would remove the word "possibly" from both sentences.

He even notes that possibly the reason the risk is higher among twins is because of the crowded uterine environment. Word says correct way is twins are.

He even notes the possibility that the risk is higher among twins due to the crowded uterine environment. (cite)


Another study published in Archives of General Psychiatry, around the same time as Dr. Hallmayer's has even suggested that antidepressants may possibly be a factor.

Unknown name Archives of General Psychiatry study, contemporary with Dr. Hallmayer's article, suggested/stated/theorized that antidepressants may be a factor. (cite)


Without reading the material surrounding these sentences, this is the best I can do with editing. It may not make sense in context.
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Have you tried printing it out and reading it on paper? That's the first thing I do with every.single.paper I write, because it makes it so much easier to "see" the mistakes and places where it could be reworded.
Awesome suggestions ladies!! I'll be noting all this tomorrow when I start reworking it. I pray I pass this class....it's so important I keep my GPA up.
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http://citationmachine.net/index2.php

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Re: Paper help- nevermind :-) I'll try harder on it tomorrow

*cries* I don't know what to do. Mom said Bre was throwing up during the night. Bre sleeps in her bed. How do I finish my observation hours and get paper help in person when I can't send her to my babysitter's and affect all her kids and then over to her Pre-K class? My gf that was over two days ago had a stomach bug hit her yesterday, but I didn't think we'd end up with it.
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Re: Paper help- nevermind :-) I'll try harder on it tomorrow

Oh ma this terrifies me. I enrolled to finish a bs in Psy. I have not been in school for years and always did mla. I am scared to register for classes.
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You should be able to download an apa format program and just plug in your paper. I had one in nursing school

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